The Investigation of Emily Grey
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The Investigation of Emily Grey
I BELIEVE IN MULTIVERSES!
I've been writing a new Daniel Miles story, one about if he would've stayed as a rural town police officer.
I don't know, maybe I'll change the hero's name down the road. Maybe, he got transferred. Maybe, I just really like the name. Or maybe, MULTIVERSE!!!!!!! cop out
But anyways, if you'd like to read what I have so far, and please leave some criticism, the preview code will be upin a bit NOW.
http://figment.com/books/742566-The-Investigation-of-Emily-Grey
I've been writing a new Daniel Miles story, one about if he would've stayed as a rural town police officer.
I don't know, maybe I'll change the hero's name down the road. Maybe, he got transferred. Maybe, I just really like the name. Or maybe, MULTIVERSE!!!!!!! cop out
But anyways, if you'd like to read what I have so far, and please leave some criticism, the preview code will be up
http://figment.com/books/742566-The-Investigation-of-Emily-Grey
- Click for NEW Early Access Code:
- VDQ78-22KO2-45H8V
Last edited by Lark Dawkins on Thu Jan 30, 2014 4:00 am; edited 1 time in total
Re: The Investigation of Emily Grey
Hey, Lark, I'm having trouble even reading it. I can't seem to read passed the preview? Do I need to be a member on the website to read your story? This is why I haven't gotten back to you with my critical review muwahahahaha!
merryhappyness- Posts : 41
Join date : 2013-02-24
Location : 221 Baker Street
Re: The Investigation of Emily Grey
I just reset the access key and it seems to work now. I tried accessing it signed out and it looped back, hopefully you can get it now.
Re: The Investigation of Emily Grey
Okay, I read it... I don't know how much I can review so far considering so little is published as of now. However, I found myself engrossed. Even with the short chapters, I found myself wanting to know even more. You're very detailed, but I feel like there needs to be a little more explaining. Then again, the story isn't over yet, so maybe you haven't gotten to the nitty-gritty yet.
All and all, your sentence structure and dialogue keep me interested and I can't wait to read more. I, too, like to write for the fun of doing something different and I love reading others' material. Don't be afraid to be overly descriptive because you can always go back a take out what you don't think fits.
Hope this was helpful and honest enough for you. Looking forward to reading more and maybe then I can be a little more helpful. So far so good, and love what you've written so far. Keep up the good work!!
All and all, your sentence structure and dialogue keep me interested and I can't wait to read more. I, too, like to write for the fun of doing something different and I love reading others' material. Don't be afraid to be overly descriptive because you can always go back a take out what you don't think fits.
Hope this was helpful and honest enough for you. Looking forward to reading more and maybe then I can be a little more helpful. So far so good, and love what you've written so far. Keep up the good work!!
merryhappyness- Posts : 41
Join date : 2013-02-24
Location : 221 Baker Street
Re: The Investigation of Emily Grey
I like the use of "tote bags" Keep it up, I enjoy reading it.
BeyondGroovyGaming- Posts : 219
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